Once upon a time there was a fairy princess named Fairy Picker,Fairy picker always picked her nose and one day her dad said "if I see you pick your nose again your going in the jar"So she picked her nose and her dad put her in the jar. The body guards watched her the whole day and then all of a sudden she casted a spell on everyone and she got out of the jar and put everyone else in the jar.
I rolled a 5 and instead of just saying the jar you could say the big or giant jar.
This is a fairy she has been causing trouble all over the land. The people were fed up with her so they called the knights to come capture her so that she couldn't make any more trouble. The people are very delighted now. Every day she tries to get out but it never works. The people now live happily ever after.
You have no comma errors
You should try harder on your sentences. Put a period after fairy. Capitalize She.
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once upon a time there was a girl. Her name was princess baby face awesome cat lover the 2nd. She was practicing her spells then she made a giant jar appear. Then she climbed in and got stuck so the guards tried to get her out then. She got arrested for not having a jar license! The End... maybe
One the unicorn princess Unitonia. Was walking around her palace and she saw some knights. They were not usually around this part of the kingdom. Then she went up to the knight and he took her and blindfolded her. When he took the blindfold off she was in a glass jar. She asked them why she was in the glass jar. They just said because. Then when it got dark outside the knights left and her pink fluffy unicorn came. The unicorn helped get the princess out of the jar and back to her kingdom. Then the knights found her and she lived in the jar for the rest of her life waiting for someone to come get her. THE END
I rolled a 5 I found nothing good job.
Once a pone a time their was this girl named lady peepot she lived a happy life and she was the king of the jar kingdom and one day she did something so bad that they put her in jail.She spent so much time in there she became a wizard and then she made a wand out of foam and then she grabed some of the sun and BOOM!!!!!!!!!she exploded the jail sell and she hipnotised three guards and then she got her kingdom back and to this day that pinch of sun still lies in the thrown lies the sun in the dead body of the queen
I rolled a 2. There should be a comma between time and their, and don't use "and" so much! Just use commas and periods. Other than that, GOOD JOB!!!!!
The story begins when this girl is forced to marry a guy 13 years older than her. This girls name is Lillianna. She is 16 years old. Her mother died from a horrid disese called gooblin buterball syndrome. On her wedding day she sees a Squirrel That is talking to her so she follows him. She falls down A snake hole when she got to the bottom She was greeted by Three guards and they Locked her in a mason jar . They said "use your powers" So she did kinda what spiderman did and did a bunch of hand motions and a beam of light came out of her hands and she was teleported to the Mrs Madhatter and they lived happily ever after. In the world of wonderland.
Okay so this story is probably Harry Potter all over again! So there is this little girl yes a girl not a boy. She is one scary night walking in the woods with this red stone on her pocket. She is trying to get to the secret jar of mystery, but the thing is though that it is guarded by 3 guards and are very protective over the jar. But she somehow gets in the jar with out the guards seeing her. That's when she saw the sun coming up and what she was told was she has to do it before day. Anyway so she reaches in for the stone and pulls it out and lifts it up and just this weird beam of light shoots up into the sky and that's how the darkness didn't take over the world.
Rolled a 1
No Errors Great Job! :)
There once was a little girl, but not just any kid. She had a magical power to shoot light out of her hands into the sky. It's kind of her hidden talent, but it's not very hidden. She always has a sort of glow on her face, and she loves to go to the beach. She really enjoys the warm feeling on her skin and the sand between her toes. The townspeople don't agree with her, though. They think she's dangerous. They then decided to lock her in a giant jar in the dark woods with knights guarding it at all times. She will never have the ability to be free again.
I looked for spelling errors and could not find any.
Well, I rolled a six, and you have nothing to fix! ;)
There are no spelling errors
HEY I am Mrs. don't know allot .I am in here because i don't know anything . their was peanut butter in the jar so i dived in head first cause u know that peanut butter is like super good.After I jumped in those totes ugly guys shut the lid ,and their is like no air in here so I am shooting fire out of my mouth to break the glass but it did not work and i died .
There was this tasty peanut butter in a giant jar/
"Let me out!!!" A long time ago there was an evil queen. After they got her she was trapped in this jar that is magic proof so that she will never be able to use her powers to get out. Even though the jar is magic proof they still need knights to guard just in case somebody comes by and decides to break the jar to set her free. The knights keep telling her that her magic will never work, but she keeps trying no matter what. The knights don't think anything of it because they think that the jar is fine for her they don't worry about her getting out. One day she was using her magic so powerfully that it cracks, she keeps going and it bursts. The knights are out cold, she takes all their supplies and heads for the forest, that was the last time anybody saw her again.
Thanks for rescuing me, but first let me let you why I was in there. I was at home making apple butter, when suddenly guards.
rolled a 5 no error great job
You have no spelling errors.
Hi my name is Barb, I am trapped in a glass. I didn't do anything wrong. The trapped me because I was pretty to go out into the wild. So they trapped me. I haven't seen the sun so long. Then one day a there was light. I was so happy I almost cried. I hope I can see the light again someday. I also wish I could go to the bathroom.
They trapped, sun in so long,take out the a in "then one day there."
Hi my name is Barb and i'm trapped in a glass when i didn't do anything wrong.
I should be capitalised
Once upon a time Julie met a fairy her name war Robert She gave Julie three wishes. One day she was looking for a new home and she saw the jar she decided that would be her new home. One of Julies wishes was she could shoot light out of her hands when she got comfy in her new home she decided her new home needed some light so she used her power and lit her house. The other two wishes were the could think of any thing she wanted and it would appear in front of her that's how she decorated her house. Her other wish was that she had a pet monkey. Her monkeys name was Robert named after her fairy friend Robert.
War to Was
Period after "Robert"
Comma after "jar"
Capitalize the S
Period after "hands"
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Comma after "home"
Period after "light"
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the to they
comma after "friend"
It was a normal day until,"carriers" came. There is really no name that the king gave us so we made our own. The reason we call them the carriers is because all they do is randomly grab someone and then they disappear and we've never ever seen the same person again.(alive for that matter) Well the reason I'm telling this story is because well I got captured or carried. well so being the dumb person I am I go up to the nearest carrieer and start punching and kicking him because he took my friend. so I got taken into this jar and I've been here ever since.
I am a fairy. Call me Miss.Bubbles. The reason I am trapped inside this hideous jar is because i was doing my work and I spilled my Pumpkin Spice Latte all over my laptop. If that stuff happens you have to report it but you know I didn't because i didnt want to get in trouble with my boss so all I did was I shut my laptop and I returned it to the lobby, And I picked up a new on without telling anybody! Then my boss of bosses found out and she took my wings away and stuck me in a jar.
I am a fairy, call me Miss. Bubbles.
You have no comma errors. My opinion would be to wright more.
I am a fairy, cal me Miss Bubbles You misspelled one cap your i'
As I try to regain power from the sun, I think back through the events of the day. This morning, I was just walking through the forest, minding my own business. As I was gathering pixie dust I came across a fat little caterpillar who had rolled over. I tried to pick her up, but she was just too heavy. I then put together a little contraption, somewhat like what Tinker Bell would do. However, everyone knows Tinker Bell is just a myth that has been passed down for centuries and told to little children throughout the years. I though, am very real.
I heaved the little caterpillar up with all my strength. She was so happy, she started singing... really loudly. I'm pretty sure the entire forest heard the high pitched voice of the delighted caterpillar. All of a sudden, knights came streaming out of the forest. They were gigantic! I tried to hide, but they were just to fast. The knights picked me up and put me in a glass jar like I was some kind of bug. I am now weak and am not able to fly, but they must have forgot that I can regain power from the sun.
No errors, Great job!
no errors great job lindsay great great job
I found no errors.
Once upon a time there was a fairy princess the Patra. Patra was very outgoing and did a lot of dares. On Friday the 13th, she did one of the dumbest things of her life. Her friend Paris dared her to ask the kings peasant out on a date. What do you think she did? Of course she did it. She stomped right into the gates of the Palace and asked him on a date. NO! He said and he threw her in a glass jar the size of Patra. Paris was devastated. She had a great sister her whole life but now she is gone forever. In the distance she heard the king say "off with her head" and Paris sat there crying for a long long long time.
Great job no errors.
Ever had a moment when your stomach gets butterflies that are going the opposite direction? Or maybe your going down a slide then all of a sudden the slide is gone and you go flying for a little bit and you almost pee your pants? Yeah imagine that feeling when your falling 200 feet off the ground. I could feel the ground leaving me as I fell. Being summoned is hard. This time I decided to take the form of a beautiful maiden. Hmmm what should I name myself? Jasmine. Nah too original. I bit my tongue thinking. And before I could say "Ow!" (Or jaspinos and mustard mix well while dancing in accolades and french fries.) I Appeared. It was just like that. Just POP! and i'm there. I looked around, but apparently not fast enough. As I turned someone chanted a spell that put me in a giant jar. I looked around only to meet eyes with a guard. We stared at each other for about 25 minutes. I think he was a demon too or something, because me and his eyes kept going in and out. Like in those cartoon things.
I didn't get to finish.
no errors found
Once upon a time, there was a girl named Jo. Jo was exploring in the forest and she saw three knights. The knights were chasing her around until they finally caught her. They put Jo in a giant jar. She didn't know how to get out, but she forgot she had magical powers. Jo made a spell that made a lightning bolt so she could escape. She lived happily ever. THE END :D
Rolled a one.
One day a fairy tale was causing trouble. So the villagers called the knights and they captured her and put her in a jar. The people lived happily ever after!
Good job Creighton!
No spelling errors.
no comma errors
I'm am a fairy and I and I got trapped in a bottle and I used my magical powers to get out
I rolled a 4 I can't find any spelling errors. Good Job!
U forgot to put a pd on the end of your story.
There once was a evil candy wizard who was trapped in a jar. She was under a magic tree that only someone eviler than her could enter. She was also guarded by vegi knights that would have to be defeated with lava to get passed. The end.
Once upon a time there was a very special girl. By special I mean she had mental problems. One day she was walking in the middle of the street( like I said shes special) then all of the sudden three men in knight costumes came up to her and said " Do you want to live in a jar." Then she answered and said " ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh." "We're going to take that as a yes" said the knights in unison. That's how a very special girl ended up in a not so special jar.
Once upon a time there was a very special girl. By special I mean she had mental problems. One day she was walking in the middle of the street( like I said shes special) then all of the sudden three men in knight costumes came up to her and said " Do you want to live in a jar?" Then she answered and said " ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh." "We're going to take that as a yes." Said the knights in unison. That's how a very special girl ended up in a not so special jar.
Once upon a time there was a girl named,Elizabith the 3.She was practicing her spells and she pic a random one and she cast a spell and a hug jar appeared over her head and fell on top ofher and she couldn't get out. She was trapped and the gards were trying to help her get out but it was no use and she was trapped there forever. The End
There once was a girl. She was walking down the street one day when three knights kidnapped her. They threw her into a truck, and drove off. When they finally stopped, they were in a fairy land. They said that she was a bad girl, so they threw her in a jar. She lived the rest of her life in the jar.
The other day I was just walking around this old stuffy room, in this old stuffy house. I saw this weird looking book. I opened it up, and there were all these wonderful pictures of frogs and princesses, and many magical things. One of the pictures had a picture of this girl in a jar. I thought that the caption next to it was a story, so I read it. next thing I know I'm in a jar. I have no clue how to get out of the jar, so I start to look for the crack I saw in it earlier. I find it, but it is sealed with some kind of glue or something. I realize I have no hope, but then a magical bunny appears, and he sings this weird little song. All of a sudden, I'm out of the jar! The bunny is gone though, and I have no way of thanking him. This might have been a stupid idea, but I took the book home that day.
Once upon a time there was a little a girl but no ordinary girl she was a witch. I know what you're thinking she's not a bad witch ,but a beautiful helpful witch. "Please help me get out!" the witch cried. It appears the witch was trapped in a jar by the wicked witch. The knights freed her from the jar and she used her light power to give them all presents.
Rolled a 2..... Found no errors. Great Job!!!!!!!!!
Once upon a time there was a girl.She wasn't any ordinary girl she was only like 3 inches tall.Her power was to turn into a butterfly for camouflage and also to make light come out of her hands.There was this accutall human who saw her so the girl quickly turned into a butterfly the other girl liked the butterfly and caught it.She took it home and put it in a jar then the butterfly changed back into a girl.Then she shot the light out of her hands to try to break the glass.
This is the story of Alice in wonderland. She was getting married and didn't want to because she was forced. So she ran away and stopped. She saw a rabbit and started chasing it when she was chasing it she fell down a hole. It seemed to be endless. She was falling then when she hit the ground she had a jar on her foot. She was hungry and saw a piece of cake so she ate it and got smaller. Then three men came and put a lid on the jar. She had magical powers though, she called for help but no one came. Then she suffocated and died.
I got attacked now I'm stuck in here. HELP
Put more effort in your work. Mrs.Snodgrass told me to say that
Put more effort into your work boii
Hi i'm Sarah. I'm a fariy that lives in a tree far far away in a kingdom. Most people don't know me cause i'm small. At night when someone wishes something I make there wish come true and I can make light (but nobody knows I can). Well Someone thought I was stealing from them so they called the knights. They came and captured me and put me in a glass jar and asked me questions. While they were asking me questions the whole kingdom went pitch black dark. That's when I helped the kingdom to show I was not evil. I made the kindom light again.
Okay this is Harry Potter all over again. So this is a little girl not a boy. She was walking along the road and she came upon this house. Opened the door and this weird wise man (20) came and asked if she would like to go inside and rest and she said yes. When they were inside he got her some tea and he asked if she would like to see a trick. So when he came back he said outside their is where the trick will be.... She came outside and said all I can see is a jar what is that for? and he zapped her to have powers and she appeared to be in the jar.... She was yelling"HELP LET ME OUT"!!!!!!
Nice Story. Rolled 2, Put one between Girl and not, after "along the road, and she came" and "Came back, he said 'Outside, Thats where the trick will be' ''
rolled a 4, not spelling mess ups. good job :)
Once upon a time there was a little princess named Crystal. One night she was sound asleep and then she heard a noise. Crystal woke up startled and went and looked out of her window and saw a evil witch. The evil witches name is Glorsie and she was once a princess so pretty and kind that one day her parents left her abandoned in the castle they lived in. The witdh took Crystal to the tower that had spikes. She trapped her in a Crystal clear jar and left her to die and rot there. The reason she trapped her there is because shes the only princess left on the land. But the witch didn't know Crystal had powers in her crystal on her necklace. Then Crystal made her hands as a bowl and BOOM she broke the jar. The witch heard the noise and BAM she was transformed into a princess the end.
I rolled a 4. No spelling errors found.
lol Maria that is funny. I rolled a 1 so lets get started shall we ok. You have a couple run on. just short in it and u spelled witch wrong. Other then that I think it is good so good job.
I was trapped in a jar. I needed help. I called up my homies. They were there in a flash. The stone gaurds came from the underworld. I broke the glass because I had powers that Dora gave to me. Then Mickey mouse hit the stone gaurd and killed it. Then my real thug walked in. Spongebob Squarepants. He deafeated them all. Then I realized what the password was. 21.
I rolled a 4- you have 2 errors it's gaurd is guard and deafeted is defeated. Nice story LOL
really 21 Dora Mickey mouse real thug spongebob
I will not just stand there when you try to imposter someone into murder! But i can't really get out unless you want the full wrath of my powers!
Silly girl you don't have any powers. I don't pity you for making some up though after all you are just a little girl in a jar.
Oh yeah you have no idea who your messing with. Macy raises her hands and fires her golden light saver. She then runs to the night who doubted her and chopped off his legs. She walks to the baby tree. Turns out she has growing powers too. She puts her foot on the branch and it grows and grows until you only see the massive trunk. oh wait its coming back down but there is not a girl on it she has disappeared.
I rolled a 4. No spelling errors!
I rolled a three and you need quptation marks.
I was walking one day in a field of daisies trying to catch butterflies. When all of a sudden I ran into a sign that said jellyfish fields. I was very confused so I just kept walking, all of a sudden this weird looking tiny thing captured me and took me to a bucket looking building. He trapped me in a big jar and refused to let me go. He built robots to watch me. Lucky for me the robots broke because there was water everywhere and I got out.
Rolled a five everything was correct.
No capitalization or ending punctuation errors
Once Upon A Time.there was a small,young,pretty girl with a blonde hair and a purple dress and she lived in a Kingdom of Aboloty.In this kingdom.there was a king named Marvin Loper,who was a evil,nasty king and wanted everything in the realm.So he destoyed and brought evil to the kingdom,well the girl tried to bring light back into the kingdom but then was captured and put in a jar where three tall,strong knights with shining armor watched her.she stayed there forever but she can still see the light.
There once was a girl how liked to wander off. One day she was walking around. What she didn't know was that she was walking in a witches yard. Went she knew she was in a witches yard she stared to run. She was to late the witch got her. The witch told her that she would have to have to be small for ever and suck is a jar for ever. She made three gards wached her for ever. To never be let out. The witch leved the door craked and a light shined in.
I rolled a five and that means add objectives you had nothing to add so good job.
She was a sorceress's daughter. Almost fair of age to be wed.yet she refused. She wished she had a friend or someone to help, but evrybody avoided her and her mother was dead. Nobody spoke of her mother. One day she got a little curious. She started sneaking around the village and through her fathers quarters. She found a picture of a woman. She looked through his drawers and found a thing of papers. She started reading. She was a witches daughter! She was burned in the town square on april 28 of 1864. She started thinking for weeks straight. She started thinking if she was chosen would she have the same ability as her mother. Gaurds of the king were at the door accusing her of witch craft. She went into her bedroom and locked the door. She crawled through her window and ran faster and faster. she ran up to a very large hill and suddenly a light shone down on her. It was true she was chosen. The gaurd stood there in amazement.
Once upon a time there was a kingdom far, far, away. There was a princess loved by all. She had flowing blonde hair and eyes as blue as the sky. She had many talents and a way with light. There was trouble in the land. For no one knew that in the castle there were three evil knights. On a sunny day when nothing could go wrong, the knights kidnapped her. After that, the ways a great darkness. The knights took her into the forest and trapped her in a large glass jar. Light came through, so she used her power to make the world bright once again. Then when she slept in was dark once more. That is why there is day and night.
ways great darkness=was great darkness
dark once=darkness once
Once upon time there was a fairy princess named Bob Starr. She was the fairest of them all. But one day there was a evil Queen who wanted to poison her with an apple. She trick her to eat the apple. Then the witch put her in a glass jar.But one day there was a beam of light that broke the princess out of the jar. THE END
I did not have any spelling errors.
One day in an a land far far away. A magic goodness of light said that their are no ways to see. Then that is when she made a magic lamp to brighten the world that she did but their is no way to defend it. So she made 3 nights to it then she got in it and started to make [MAGIC]. After she did that all of the trees,plants and animals stated to come up and grow now the world is free of darkness THE END?
Rolled a 4 no spelling errors :)
One day after school I decided to take a walk in the forest. I thought it would be great for all the leaves are falling. So I went down the path in to the forest. Little did I know in these particular woods when the first leaf fell It summoned large white beings who catch anyone who walks on their beloved leaves. How do they catch them? They set traps and then once the person is caught they trow them into a gigantic glass jar. That's exactly what happened to me on this fateful day. So here I am trying to pull enough light into the jar that is will blind the white beings and they will have to let me go.
Nice job! I rolled a five, but you already use a lot of descriptive words.
Once upon a time there was a princess named Nichol. She hated pink and bright colors. She likes blue tho. She was my best friend until a new girl came to our school.... ABOUT A WEEK AGO! And nichol rarely talked to me. She even moved tables. Witch is not okay. Maybe we will get closer this SATURDAY. Even though I wanna go skating and see Jay! You probs know him but I dont wanna say. Anyway but I also wanna go wit Nichol. If I dont go with nichol she will cast a spell on me or something.
Really I think the last time I stayed with you was ABOUT A WEEK AGO!
haha yea but ur staying there tonight lol
One day I was looking at glass jars in a jar shop. I came to a magical looking jar and I looked in and found a tiny little fairy with no wings. I asked if she needed help and she said not to come near or I would be trapped in there as well. So I went to a wizard and asked or his help and he said all I needed to do was knock the shelf over. I went back to the store and knocked the shelf over and the little fairy grew and while she grew she changed into a troll. The jar was a magic jar it changed your size and your appearence. The little fairy turned out to be a troll from the magic realm........
Rolled a 4 no spelling errors nice job!
this is the story about a knight name sir higgins he had caught a fairy who planed to kill the king(don't ask how because i not sure)but anyway on with the story she started to bang on the glass she was being kept in witch sounds like when you catch a fly in a jar and it won't stop flying into the wall........
Amber is a fairy daughter of a king, and she is in timeout because she did not do her fairy chores. Her chores where to sweep the woods, Oh and by the way I am the tree and my name is Herb. I shed a lot that is why Amber had to sweep the woods was because of me. She does not like me she thinks that I am probably the messiest of them all. Even though she is pretty messy too. She still thinks that I am messier than her. Anyway that is why she is in the jar. Thanks for listening to a tree named Herb !!!!!!!!!
I rolled a 4 (Spelling errors)
-where to were
Good job ;)
rolled a 4 where to were nice job ^____^
onece apona time i was traped in a glass jare sarouned by gost fares one day the gost fares were gone so i pushed on the glass over the ege and broke the glass and rane away and the gost faires apered and cot me agean and ran away fore ever........................................................
apona= upon a
I was stuck in a cramped glass jar. The evil queen stuck me there. She thought my magic was to powerful, so she decided I needed to be shrunk and quarantined. The only way to get out of the jar was magic. And my magic isn't useful unless there is something to love. There was no love in this jar. The knights that watched over me were cruel and the tree, the tree can't talk. So, on my fifth night in the jar I have a vision of my sister telling me, "You can do it!" I believed her! (It turns out that even though she's a diva, I still love her.) My magic started working, sparks were flying, and then I sent a stream of powerful magic towards the sky. I started climbing it and I became free! I am now back to normal size and my magic is with me wherever I go.
You had no spelling errors... I loved your paragraph!!!! Great job!!!
Hi I am sharqueshia. I am really short, like as short as a pencil. One day I was just waking my normal walk and out of no where this giant trapped me in a jar. He picked me up and said "YES I found him Malik". He rushed over to see me . They took me back to this kingdom but I have no clue where it was.....
Oh no that's terrible:(
I am a pretty ice princess. We I was a teen i was stuck in a glass jar because I was the rude, brat person ever so now i am stuck in a glass jar.I really wish some day to get out of here,because i am a better person now.I learn my lesson and will be nice so let me out please.
I needs to be capitalized
Other than that Good Job
Alexandra, was a beautiful girl. She had long honey colored hair, the most beautiful brown eyes, and a kind loving heart. One day, Alexandra was walking through the forest, when she came across this lonely fox. The fox said to her "Mam, may I walk with you? I am quite lonely today, for none of my friends want to play." Being kind, Alexandra said that he may walk with her. They had been walking for quite awhile talking the whole time, when they came to this strange gate, it was tall and black with vines growing on top of it. Through the gate, they could see a round opening. Alexandra got curious and decided to check it out. The fox was followed her in the gate, but when they got to the round opening the fox did not go with Alexandra. Alexandra thought nothing of the fox not following her, for she thought he was just scared. But once she got inside the round opening, the fox nudged a round, circular object, over the opening. It wasn't until Alexandra got inside that she realized that idt was an oversized jar tipped on it's side......
Ok this is so weird,one day I woke up in a glass jar that was chaned in a castle.When I did I was forced to make a gigantic zobie out of my soul. So weird.When the zombie was done it turned on the king and and broke me free. So well I killed the coco king and I lived hapily ever after.
Once upon a time there was a jar mimic named Ted. Ted lived with a group of other mimics in a small forest. One day Ted was out for a "hop" in the woods, about five minutes into his hop he saw three knights on top of horses riding through. By Mimic Law he was to act as if he were just a jar until aggravated, once disturbed he was aloud to fight or flee. as the knights came trotting down the path one of them noticed him. The knight then came to a stop and hopped off of his horse. "What's a jar doing this far away from the castle?" said the knight. "I duno." said the one a the white horse. The knight was about three inches away from Ted, when he picked him up Ted quickly jump out of his hand and made a mad hop for his house...
Once Upon a Time, there was a little woodlen creature named, Alisa. One day she was working in the forest collecting dew drops to bring to the her village. Now she was a very powerful fairy and so an evil queen desired her power so she searched and searched and searched for this powerful fairy but could never find her. So as the fairy was collecting dew, two knights came through the forest and saw her. They tried to catch her but she bit one of them and used her powers to make the other knight turn into a frog. The one knight who got bit came behind her and snatched her and put her in a jar to take to the evil queen. It was a very long journey but the knight and the frog just wanted to get that stupid fairy back to their queen. Eventually they got there and they gave the jar to the queen and she was so excited you wouldn't be able to believe! When the queen went to open the jar the fairy flew out and flew back to the her village......
I got 4 spelling errors and the only one I saw was woodlen which should be wooden.
One day the sun got destroied and I had to go and get it back in the sky. So I had to take it to the highest point in the world to put it back I just hope I don't get followed by the people who destroied it in the first place. I got to the top and I was half way through the process...
One day the sun got destroyed*
Once upon a time, there was a fairy princess named Kimberly and she was home alone in her pineapple house with her room mate Sponge Bob and there was suddenly a knock on the "door" so Bob (for short) answered. He opened the door and there were 3 knights who where from the castle and there name was Bib, Billy, and Jake. Jake said, "I've come to take Kimberly away to the castle. And apparently she heard because she escaped out the back door, but Jake saw as she ran outside. So she ran faster and faster all the way to the woods, where she came to a sudden stop to this big glass jar that had a whole at the top. And as she stopped Jake, grabbed her by her foot and said "Oogalala Oogalala" And wings appeared on his back, then he flew up to the top and dropped Kimberly in the Jar. And she fell to her feet, and said this word that no one understood and so she held out her hand and this light appeared. And that was when the two other knights caught up and stood next to Jake and whatched Kimberly work her magic.
Once upon a time there was a little fairy named Tiffany, Tiffany was the nice's fairy in here fairy village. When she walked out from the village she noticed a big glass jar, when she walked up to the village it seemed to be getting bigger. When she was close enough She heard something in the forest to here right, a tiny wizard come running out screaming "Your Mine You Fairy" In a southern dialect voice. And out of know were she got sucked right into the jar. Then came another fairy that was determined to save Tiffany. He pulled out a sword and chopped off the wizards and and as soon as it fell the glass jar just shattered and she was save.
I rolled a 2 and found one spelling error, you our "to here right" it should be to her right.
I was a tree today, and there was a girl with glowing hands in a jar . With knights around the other side of the jar. And the girl was suppose to meet her king and she was walking to see him and three knights come up to her and put her is this big jar right by me and they where draining her powers of being the queen.
i was a tree. i did nnnnnnnnnooooooooootttttttthhhhhhhhhhhiiiiiinnnnnnnggggggg
Once there was a girl named Jar then she did something really really bad. So the king said that she should be put in jail. Then the knights came, and she killed them. Then the king said that she should be put in a jar, and he did it himself . So that is why Jar ended up in a giant jar.
no errors :)
LET ME OUT OR I WILL FLIPPING KILL YOU!!!Well I'm never getting out I guess, I say to the knights. Ok let me get my knife so I slit all there throats yeah thats what i'll do.Let me just prop it out with a stick. Then i'll shoot one of them to surprise them then slit the other twos necks. Yes this will be brilliant. BAM!!! HAHA YOU DEAD I WARNED YOU FOOL!!! Slice slice. BOOM NOW ALL OF YOU ARE DEAD I FREAKING WARNED YOU THIS WOULD HAPPEN!!! Now let me get to the king so I can steal all his jewels. Then finally...... I'LL KILL HIM. MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
Rolled a Royal one.
You forgot quotes in "Well, I'm never getting out I guess,"
And basically the entire thing.
i'll. Really. i'll.
Other than that it's fine.
Once upon a time there was a little girl named Suzy. And this little girl named Suzy was very snoopy. And as you may see in this picture she was snooping around at a kingdom. But the Knights caught her and stuffed her in a giant jar with a little bug in it. Suzy and the bug eventually became friends. And the bug helped her escape. But as she tried sneaking away there was a talking tree that gave her away. So the guards quickly trapped her in that same jar but with a different bug this time. But this bug was a killer bug and ate Suzy.
no spelling errors
You should get rid of the period in the Suzy was snoopy sentence and get rid of the and at the beginning of the sentence and make it This little girl named Suzy was very snoopy, and as you may see in this picture she was snooping around a kingdom.
Otherwise it's totally fine.
Once upon a time the was a girl who was trapped in a jar and no one let her out because the bid scary knights guarded her until one day the broke out using her magical powers.
One day I was flying because I was trying to clear my head because I just found out my pet died. I was not watching were I was going and I feel and smacked my head on the lid. Then I feel in this jar and then I used my powers to open the jar.
Once upon a time there was a girl all alone in a jar. She is small because she ate a piece of cake and made her tiny. A glass jar fell on her and thought she would die there.She stayed there for a thousand years and no one ever came to here. If you're thinking how come she stayed there for a thousand years and didn't die because when she ate the cake it gave her the power of eternal life.She was calling to her prince every single day but he never came to her. One day when a big giant monster saw her, he wanted to eat her. The monster dropped some special fairy dust on her but didn't notice. She put it on her and parts of her were glowing. She was all gold and then poof! She disappeared to her own land and thought to herself. Not everyone needs a prince to save them.
Im just a normal girl!!!! Why have you locked me in this jar!!!! Ugh there not going to respond . So well how I got here is complicated I just remember going to bed then this happeneding!!!! Ok so I can't break out its thick glass!!! Wait wo wo wo... Whats all this spiny magic that this butterfly seems to be causing it. Everything seemed to change... I start relizing that I must have some sort of power!!! All of a my hands just started pointitng to the sky! Then bam a huge light of magical colors of gold and white flew into the sky then I flew out of the HUGE cage!!! And I lived happily ever after
1. Then bam, a huge....
2. Ugh, there....
3. Ok, so I can't.....
Once upon a time there was a fairy princess that was trying to take over the soldiers village. The soldiers got angry about what her plan was. The soldiers got so mad that they formed and army and captured her in a jar.The fairy princess kept on trying to escape, so they have three guards not letting the fairy princess out of the jar.The soldiers lived happily ever after.
Okay. So here's what's happening in the above photo. Have you all seen that episode of Spongebob where he steals Mermaid-Man's belt and shrinks everyone and puts them in a jar? That's what's happening to me. Some guy, named I think, Adrian shrunk me and put me in a jar. I don't know why he would do this... except that I kinda... destroyed his mansion. Well, my family lives next door and they all look the same and I thought it was mine! So I walked in and thought I grabbed a cookie out of a box, but it was a boobie trap... and a wrecking ball with Miley Cyrus fell out of the ceiling and... well... wrecked the house! So he found out and shrunk me and put me in this jar, lonely with only a fly to keep me company. Ant the three guards over there? They're watching me to make sure I'm still in here. Well "watching". The one in the middle hasn't stopped talking! He has a lot of problems... and the other two are playing "red hands" the game where you put your hands together and try and smack the other person. Then they started playing tetris on their Gameboys. Ugh... I hate Mondays.
That was my mansion bruh Adrian lives next to me duh..... -()-
So there I was my back against a tree watching this dumb little fairy trying to exscape for a jar with her magical powers. I don't even know why we put her in a jar instead of a jail cell. not done
Rolled a 1, no errors... I think.
Nice story. :D
I had spelling corrections and this is how you spell exscape, escape, and there is nothing else.
Today was my birthday. So I decided to spoil myself and visit the jar. This is a very special jar. It is the very jar the first president of Illumination peed in because the toilet was on the fritz. He was a very dignified man, but, desperate times call for desperate measures. This was a very desperate time. So as I walked to the jar there were very menacing figures in my way. Almost metallic. Then I realized, THE JAR WAS GETTING ATTACKED BY TREES. SHINY, METALLIC TREES. DEATH METAL TREES. I heard the music play from meters away, but I didn't mind and started jamming. BUT THEN THE MUSIC CHANGED. TO MARILYN MANSON. THEY WERE SATANIST DEATH METAL TREES. MY GOD. So I took out my wet noodle gun, and shot them. They exploded, and I got a sweet guitar. Then I noticed, SATANIST DEATH METAL KNIGHTS! I shot them too. BUT THEY SURVIVED. So I shot them again. They died that time. There actually was no people in them. They were just Satanist Death Metal Knights. Oh, satanists. Then I found the jar. Turns out the pee fermented into a fairy thing. I took her out and she bit me. I then contracted a fatal disease, SATANIC DEATH METAL EBOLA. Just kidding, I was fine. I just put the fairy back into the jar and left, savoring the memories. Ahhhhh.
TL;DR Fergus Republic is weird.
I rolled a three and no errors...and WOW that was very,very,very,very...odd
no comma errors.
Monsieur, you've spelled Republic wrong. You have also forgot to capitalize Travis Republic. Also, the Travis Republic is of the Rubber Islands, not the Illumination.
i read through and i didn't find any coma errors.
I ment to do that
Once apon at time there was a fairy princess.That flew around the castle and when the father came back.He grounded her and put her in a chair.The king forgot she could fly so she got out and so when the king came back again she was gone.He found her again and put her in a jar.Then she used her magic and melted it and the king said O well.
"Get her in the jar!" yells one of the guards. The guards came through the doors of the room, they are bringing some weird object wrapped in a big dark purple bag. They stuck it in the giant jar in the middle of the room. I'm just a random tree in the corner of the room. The object that was in the bag found its way out of the bag and it appears to be a girl, she is trying to find her way out, but after a while she just stood in the middle of the jar put a big smirk on her face then pulled out a bomb. She grabbed the bomb pulled a cord then the whole jar blew up. Honestly the whole explosion was pretty cool. Well once it was done exploding she flew out and we never saw her again.
Rolled a 6. No errors found.
"Appears" in your fourth sentence should be "appeared." Also put a period after girl in your fourth sentence, then capitalize "she." Otherwise, I thought your paragraph was awesome!
My golden, blond hair was in beautiful curls, and my bright purple dress was silky, soft. Right now there's only a few problems: I'm stuck in a jar, there's an evil sorcerer trying to take over the world, and my boyfriend just dumped me. The only thing keeping me from going insane right now is my awesome hair. One of the gaurds in a metal suit is walking up to me. He says "It's time."
"Time for what?"
"Time for you to help Okealas take over the world."
"Wait? What? I never agreed to that!"
"You didn't have to. Your his prisoner."
Then Okealas walks in with Max, my ex-boyfriend. "Max what are you doing here?"
"I'm helping Okealas take over the world."
Great, so now he's my ex and evil. This is so not going to help with me being in high school.
I rolled a 2 and I found no comma errors. Good Job!
I'm chasing a girl who stole my jar, me and my two friends attacked her with chainsaws, swords, and my tomahawk. I said to her, "This is what you get for stealing my jar, girl!", and I tomahawk chomped her! I through my jar, and then she exploded into light. I was all like,"Whhhaat?". I forgot about it all and filled my jar with pickles again.
ok... ummmm.... but good umm corrections
I threw* my jar
i rolled a three