Help we were kidnapped. I should probably rewind to how this happend. Well one day me and my brother we just being toys when our owner got bullied and the bully took us away. I almost died So now we are in the back of the bullies car and we are going to the toy graveyard I hope we get out of here in time. Wait we are free we just hopes out of the window whill it was down now we will return to our owner.
-"I almost died."
-"...going to the toy graveyard."
-"Wait we are free."
In this paragraph I found 1 mistake. In the 4th sentence, the word so, the s on so is capitalized and it is not supposed to be.
Hi we are storm troopers if your wondering how we got in the back seat of this station wagon I couldn't tell you but I do remember a little so much blood tear gas bombs bang and then it gets fuzzy but were just watching a chubaca do gagedom style.
Ugh it was a terrible idea to try and destroy Luke Skywalker on our own.. Who am I kidding? I mean we may be the best of our group but even I can't shoot straight. I miss everytime.... That's how your little heroes make it out alive. Now here we are being hunted by Bubba Fet. In the human wotld where no one can find us since we look like toys. We caught a ride and supposedly we are going to where the best stuff on Earth is made. Yeah you heard right we are going to Snapple. We will hide ink the machines and die a glorious death sacrificing ourselves for your tastebuds. Ya me and my friend here, we mean business. To bad their dog that looks extremely alike Jar Jar attacked us.... Now we will have to settle for the back of the owner's dog's car. Like I said this whole toy thing was not a good idea.
Ugh, it was a terrible idea to try and destroy Luke Skywalker on our own.. Who am I kidding? I mean, we may be the best of our group but even I can't shoot straight. I miss everytime.... That's how your little heroes make it out alive. Now here we are being hunted by Bubba Fet. In the human world where no one can find us since we look like toys. We caught a ride, and supposedly we are going to where the best stuff on Earth is made. Yeah you heard right we are going to Snapple. We will hide ink the machines and die a glorious death sacrificing ourselves for your tastebuds. Ya me and my friend here, we mean business. To bad their dog that looks extremely alike Jar Jar attacked us.... Now, we will have to settle for the back of the owner's dog's car. Like I said, this whole toy thing was not a good idea.
You forgot a lot of commas...
I found no errors.
The stormtroopers got in the backseat of the car because Jett put them there when he was board and now whenever you sit down they watch you. Cewbacca laughs at them all the time because they are stuck and he can just go where ever he wants.
Hey I rolled a 1 and and there is no errors.
I am a trooper thingy what ever you wanna call me. Any way we were just in like a battle in the picture above you see us leaving the battle in our ropes. I you want to know what we are looking at is lots of grown men shooting at each other. The fight was pretty bad me and my bud right next to me did really good so they decided to bench us.
Our mission was simple; we had to escape from the grasp of an evil little boy whom has been mistreating us for years. We had decided to wait until the right moment; when we go along with his family on a vacation trip. We were stuffed into a pouch behind the car seat, and the area around us smelled old and musty. We tried to ignore the stench as we slowly climbed out of the pouch. Our chewed up arms and legs got stuck a few times along the way, which didn't help. After what seemed like hours, we were within reach of the window. The view was pretty cool outside. Everything zoomed past us. We must have been there for too long, though, and we were picked up and attacked by the giant little monster once again.
Great story! I couldn't find anything that was wrong. Great job!
Once there was a storm trooper His Name Is Jeff. He has a friend bill! Bill came over to play tick tact paper scissors. He was really bad so Jeff let him win 1 round. Then bill began to brag tell finally the la la land of bragyness king came up to him and punched him in the face then he telaported bill and Jeff to the car and they got stuck in Toyota logo trap!
Capitalize "bill" to Bill, and don't capitalize "His Name Is", it should be his name is.
Once there was a storm trooper, his name is Jeff.
These guys are getting a ride to the bad guys village. They have to be quiet or else they will get caught and the driver will throw them out the window!
rolled a one no errors.
One day we were walking to school and a little kid got out of a car and picked us up and because of that we are now in the little kids car. We are seated in a little net thing with a bunch of magazines and books. Its not very comfortable but I guess it will do. I have waited for this day! To get taken away to another family so me and my friend can start a new life. This is not really what i had in mind to the start of a new life but it works. Lets just hope that this is gonna be a better life then being lonely.
No erros good job
I rolled a 3 and I don't see and any sentence structure errors so yeah! Good Job!!!
Rolled a 3. I didn't see any errors.
No errors. Good job.
No errors! Good job!
So one day my friend Bob and I went to take a ride with our master, If you didn't know already we are storm troopers. Our master took us out of a box and started making us kill each other. We ran all around trying to find an escape. Then we finally found this net thing. We hid it and tried to stay hidden and not long after that we heard our master trying to find us. Our master is That One Guy. Ya I guess it doesn't sound that scary, but when he's trying to make you kill your best friend, well you know what I mean. Our master is still trying to find us to this day. He still hasn't even looked back here in the car since we were on the trip to the Grand Canyon. Anyway, we're still back here trying to stay alive.
Everything is good. That One Guy.
good job you did well.
Hi, my name is Bob and this is my partner, Jim! We do some crazy stunts together and this is a picture of when we were climbing a cargo net in the back of a moving car. When we were doing this stunt Jim got hurt when his foot slipped and when he was falling he grabbed on the net as he was falling with his hands and one hand and arm were pulled out of their socket. So I told the driver of the car to go to the E.R. When we got there they looked at his shoulder and it was bad so they had to do surgery on him that hour, so they took him in the operating room and operated on his shoulder and got it all fixed up, but he has never be the same Ol' Jim since his bad accident! The End!!!!!!!!
nice job I found errors.
Hey, I'm TK-421. My partner, TK-422, and I are on a special mission for Lord Vadar. Our mission, to take down the Controller. The Controller is the only thing that stands between Lord Vadar and power. We were following our prey when, he saw us and picked us up. We were zipped into a bag and carried a long ways before stopping. We were just about to escape when I felt something move very fast. A plane is my best guess. Our bag was thrown around then we were pulled out by the Controller. He moved our limbs and torsos at odd angles. Then stuck us in a net. As soon as the Controller was sleeping, we struggled wildly, flailing around. Suddenly, I felt my stomach drop as we descended. The Mother Controller picked up the Controller and left us. So here we are, waiting for our victim to return.
Nice job! I found no capitalization of ending punctuation errors.
My class rolled a six. Make your ninth and tenth sentences a compound sentence. Otherwise I thought your story was great.
Once upon a time there was these little storm troopers that popped to life. They knew nothing about this world that they came to life in. So they desided that they would explore. They looked all around the store until they say this big glass box. In order to get to the box they had to climb a rope. When they reached the top they say what was in the glass box it was a furry slobery thing. Which they came to decide that it is a dog. After that day they went back to being toys and they would never come to life again. THE END
I rolled a 3 for sentence structure and found no errors. Nice job!
I am under command of Darth Vader, or I was. I am now trapped in some weird device called an airplane, I will tell you how I got there. Me and my good buddy storm-trooper #3074 were doing a routine patrol when all the sudden this old looking green thing jumped out of nowhere and used the strongest force I have ever seen and sent me and storm-trooper #3074 to this weird planet called "Earth." Then this freakish todler giant picked us up and gave us a bath in this cave. Then I ended up in this airplane pocket.
Here I am with my best friend Jo. We are stuck on a bus. It was all of Jo's fault. This is how we got stuck on the bus. So we were at his house when his owner brought a friend over. The owners name was Bob. They were playing with us when Jo said "Can I get something to eat?'' They got so scared they almost cried. They ran out of the room and got their mom. The mom came in and saw Jo talking. That's how we got on the bus.
Hi! We are a storm troopers and we are going around the world in a bus in this picture if you would like to join us just send the money for the trip to www.reblesarmy.com.
P.S(this IS not a army school ahahahahahah....ahahahah...ahahaha.)
Once upon a time there was 2 storm troopers named Billy and Joe they
been living in the back of a dusty old station wagon because there owner, a two year old child left them on the floor. Sometimes they wonder if they will ever be found. One day when Joe gets board he hangs on the the net that keeps all the garbage together, to see if anyone was coming to claim them. The next day he got really anciouse to excape the station wagon so he climbed up the net and found that the window was ajar. They didn't know what they could use to climb up there but all of a sudden billy climbed up the net hearing what Joe was say so billy all of a sudden got the idea to snap the net to let all the junk all tumble to the floor....
I rolled a 1 and I see no errors.
Well as you can see we are stuck in the back of a car. Our owner was playing with us on a really long car ride. We were having the time of our lives. Until he stuck us back here when he went inside. We have been here for days and usually we are able to get out of things like this but there is holes and Jim's hand is stuck in one and my leg is stuck in the other. We just can't seem to reach each other. We would be yelling but we aren't aloud to let our owners know we can talk. Finally we see a little crack in the window and we try as hard as we can to get our limbs out of the holes. I decided that I didn't care anymore, I'm going to get us out of here. I use all my might to break free and then I heard a pop. My leg was free! I was no able to get Jim's arm out of the hole. We got out and went to the window to get out, and we walked back in the house and everything was back to normal.
I got a 3 as you may already know.. I found no errors.
We're stuck. In a net. And there's this thing outside the window... I don't know what it is though. We are here because of an abusive little kid. A little kid that chews us and stuff. Gross. And now we're in a net. And that thing outside the window... It's getting closer. It's gaining fast. I still don't know what it is. Wait, it's the kid. With Luke and Darth Vader. Gotta get out of here... Oh wait. It's not that tight. I can just crawl out. I guess the other guy is dead, 'cuz he's not moving. Meh. The kid's almost to the door, gotta get out of here fast. Barbie Car! Never thought I'd be actually happy to see it. Kind of an ugly shade of pink but whatever. Wait, the door just opened! Epic boss batt- and he picked me up. And threw me. Against a wall. Now I'm missing a leg. Great. I guess escape will have to happen another day. So close. Not really, I was still like a yard away from that car. It may not seem that far to you but I remind you that I am a toy. Farewell, if I survive the surgery I am about to have. From the kid. Now that I think about it it's kind of weird that he tied us to a car seat in the kitchen. Where'd he even get it? Okay, he's pressing the leg on and I'm about to black out. Farewell for real.
MRS.SODGRASS ROLLED A ONE FOR ME AND EVERYONE ELES! I saw no errors thank you
Mrs. Snodgrass rolled a one no errors.
We rolled a 1 no errors.
KABOOM! Oh no the Star Destroyer blew up! I'm sorry I forgot to introduce myself. My name is storm trooper but people call me weak. Me and my friend were working when all of a sudden the ship blew up. The next thing I knew we were in the back seat of a car and we seemed to have shrinked. Or cars have gotten bigger. Either way We found a net that had a hook on it and opened the window and jumped out. when we landed it was like a reunion! Darth Vader was there ( He wasnt in the best mood) and admiral pike was there, so was storm trooper 1,2,3,4,5 oh you get it.
Mrs. Snodgrass rolled a 6
need to add comma and uncapatilize We
Either way, we found a net that had a hook on it and opened the window and jumped out!
One day my friend and I were just hanging out. Then all of the sudden this little boy came and over and picked me and my friend up! He started walking around this huge house. We were starting to get dizzy. Then he opened a door and went out side. And it was raining! Me and my friend were soaking wet! Then he opened another door and sat down inside a car. He put us on the back of the seat in this net thing. We were stuck. We drove around for a while until we stopped. The little boy got and and left us in the car! We had no idea where we were. We would just have to wait until he came back for us.
No capitization problems. No puctuation errors.
No capitalization errors and no ending punctuation errors. Good job!
No capitization or punctuation errors.
Man being stuck down here is horrible. The only reason I got up here is that my buddy over here messed with the wrong machine in Darth Vader's Machine Shop. We were working on our own project in the shop when we saw someone else's project. My buddy saw it was a gun and so he shot it at me and it bounced off me and got on him to. It tuned out to be a shrink ray and we are stuck down here probably forever.
Rolled a three. Good job no errors. I liked your story
We are two storm troopers. We work for darth vader. Im very bored in this car. Some kid put us here. The End
Well me and my friend were just traveling across the galaxy to see jabba the hut. Sure he's a flat blob of crap. But hey he gives us free drinks. Well anyway when we were about 20 lightyears away is when we got shot down by a wookie. I passed out and when I woke up I noticed that we were dressed up in star troopers suits and we were in a jail cell. Me and my friend noticed though that they left us with a knife. Well I don't think who ever put us here was the brightest crayon in the box. When we got out we knocked teo huys out to get their blasters. We took them then we saw a huge room. We thought it was who ever captured us. When we went in we about fainted it was jabba. That backstabbing blob of crap. Well I just shot him ad made him explode. Just so you know don't ever shoot a blob of crap unless you want a blob of crap all over you. My friend got the worst of it he got some in his mouth... nasty. Well we learned never to trust anyone even your own friends. So at that moment I shot my friend... what you never know if he was going to shank me for all my money.
Our class rolled a 3.
"Sure he's a flat blob of crap, but he gives us free drinks."
There was a lot of other errors I didn't feel like writing.
Jabba the Hut is the only capitalization error.
Once apon a time their was a guy until he got caught and died and ways while they where killing that guy bobby came along and he was a strom trooper until he died in the rancor pit well because luke skywalker threw him into jabbas belly and he bounced off of him belly rancor was a portal to a nother universe so now hes stuck with some little kid giant two big giants and gus
You have no periods and they are run on sentences.
In a galaxy far far away, there was two stormtroopers. They were on a secret mission to wipe the Baccas off of the face of Alderaan. The job was tough they first had to scout the area. Then they had to place the bombs without being seen. Then then they had to detonate the bombs. There was one problem though the bombs wouldn't detonate. The Storm brothers are in trouble. The Bacca police come up behind them and take them to the back of an airplane seat. That is how they got there in the first place. THE END.
Once upon a time there was a storm trooper and his friend the other storm trooper.They like to go on adventurers and one day they found themselves into some trouble. They were caught in a net and couldn't get help. so they had to cut the net and it all ended happily ever after.
Rolled a 1 no errors
There once was two storm troopers.
Every day they get into a random car a climb all the way to the top.
One day they got onto a van and a kid saw the storm troopers and the kid started to play with them.
They got played every day because the kid toked the storm troopers every where he went.
Because of that they were stuck in a van and never go nowhere and the only thing they stared out in the window.
this is the story of three storm troopers that got lost in a world of giants. It all started with a prank phone call that involved a lawsuit (i'm not going to get into it right now. ) anyways after the call was made they had made a run for it because the person they called just so happened to be the emperor, So they got really scared and one died on the trip to this world they were hiding on. then they were tangled in some sort of trap that was inescapable...
We rolled a one, no capitalization or punctuation errors good job.
A long time ago yet somehow in the future, two storm troopers names Bobby and Bob were left on the ground in the back of Ford Prius. The person that left them there was non other Luke Babywalker. That monster. That 3 year old left them there to die. But after about 10 years the baby came back. But was not a baby anymore and threw them in a trash can! The end.
Once upon a time there were two mini Stormtroopers.
Everyday they had to ride the bus with their owner, Julia.
One day, Julia left them on the bus.
Because of that, they spent all day on the bus while it drove around delivering the children to school.
Because of that, they were picked up and taken to lost and found.
Until finally, Julia came and found them.
-One day, Julia left them on the bus to rot, and suffer.- I rolled a 6.
My friend, Timothy, and I are on our way to freedom. It all started the day Darth Vader stopped giving us cool uniforms. He explained that there was a budget cut, and we would have to stop ordering our awesome storm trooper suits. This news made Timothy and I very sad. We then decided to go on strike. We jumped out of the spaceship and floated into the earth's atmosphere. With a splash, we fell into a tiny pond partly covered with pretty lilies. We waded out and began our adventure. We climbed treacherous mountains, crossed raging rivers, and finally, hopped into the back seat of a beat-up blue mini van. Some may say that this is where our adventures end, but I think this is just the start.
I rolled a six and there are no errors. Good Job. :)
Once upon a time there was 2 storm troopers. They had landed on earth because they hadn't seen it before. They decided to go on a journey. They always saw mystical beings that they called HUMANS. They kept going and they read a sign that said bakery. So they went in. They hopped on a counter and read a sign that said peach pie $4.99. When the cashier took one pie out they hoped in and hoped they could eat the whole this. Later that day they went outside and were stuffed but kept walking. They found this really fast bullet that was really long and they couldn't read it. So they got close and hopped on at the same time. They found this gargantuan door and couldn't open it but the cracks at the bottom they could crawl under. They reached the humans and jumped in the little pocket and then they...... died!
Once upon a time there was two stormtoopers and they went on a trip. A weird trip though. They were just having a normal day in the toy box and then all of a sudden a kid grabbed them out of the toy box and took them in a car to go on a trip with him. On the way they got in to some trouble. The trouble when you get stolen away from the owner and then they have to find the kid who took it and all that stuff. Well that happened in the gas station and his mom was getting gas and then this teenager just took the two storm troopers away from him! You know how moms are when someone takes something away from there kid. He got it back and the storm troopers and the boy lived happily ever after with there trip.
I rolled a 3. No errors good job.
Do you know why we are stuck in this net? Well I'll tell you. It was in China, we just got put in the box and we were off to America, then the plane landed. We were shipped to Ohio were a little boy yanked me and Lewis off of the shelf. We were swiped across a bright red light then shoved in a sack. On the trip back to the home the boy lived in Lewis said "I'm freaking out right now". As it turns out he only played with us for a few minutes in the car when his mom told him to put us in the net, the car jerked around for a half a second, then nothing. We have been here for 6 years.
Once Upon a Time, there was two Stormtroopers named John and Jeff. They were just strolling along the sidewalk when some random kid came riding on his little tricycle. They almost got ran over but thankfully the kid didn't, but the kid did notice them though. John and Jeff both sighed with relief thinking that they were ok, but they weren't. The kid backed up in his tricycle and picked them up and shoved them in his backpack. John and Jeff were having quiet a bumpy ride in the kid's backpack for awhile until all of a sudden it stopped. They slowly unzipped the zipper to the backpack to discover they were in a room of some sort. The kid's room. They noticed no one was in there so they climbed out. When they got to the ground they saw that the mysterious room was very messy. So, they decided to hide among the rest of the junk until they found a way out of there. They had been hiding for a long time and fell asleep. They woke up to a loud noice. They woke up startled and slowly climbed out from under the bed. It sounded like a loud buzzer. It was an alarm. The kid got up and ran to the backpack and noticed they werent in there........ Didnt get finished.......
I rolled a six, no errors.
Ok so its Halloween and a kid dressed as Darth Vader and has put these storm troopers in jail! The storm troopers are trying to figure a way out. They have decided to roll down the window and jump out then they will be free- the end.
Our class rolled a 1, no capitalization errors or punctuation errors, but you need to put a apostrophe on its because it would be it is Halloween or it's Halloween.
My class rolled a 1 and you didn't have any errors. Good job!
comma after ok, take away 'and' and the first sentence, period after 'free'
"Once upon a time, there was I, and Me. No seriously, my name is Me, and my brother's name is I."
"Shut up, I!"
"Forget Me, he's a downer. Anyways, we are two toy Storm Troopers. I, as in me, but me as in I is the fun gun... trooper...guy, and Me, as in him, but as in Me... as in him, is the "follow the rules" kind of Storm Trooper. Me, not at all. We don't anything except for sitting in the back of our owners car. We no one but us toys are around, I walk and chat with the other lonely toys."
THE END (My ending sucks.)
Once upon a time there was Bill and Jim storm troopers that just fought the evil people and escaped from the evil peoples prison. They where the only survivors of the war so they where sent to prison and they just escaped. They where going the the death star to be free.
I rolled a three and i didn't see any errors.
Once upon a time, there was the storm troopers were trying to escape from their enemy. Every day , they would hop into the basket of the back of a train seat and travel many miles to avoid their enemy. But one day they were found and put into prison... The end.
Put a comma between enemy and but. No other errors! Good Job!
once upon a time there was two storm troopers. Wow we should not trusted luke skywalker he is stupid. Hello i'm rex i am on the left. Hello I'm cody i am on the right side. We where going to get jabba the hut son. Hey what that sound it sound like a baby. It was the hut. So lets get out of here rocket shoes. crack. Well we are stuck in here . Until finally obi- one he trew a rope and got us out.
Once upon a time there were two storm troopers that were hit with a shrink ray. It took them awhile to adapt to this, but they were okay. One day when they were trying to be turn back to normal, they were sent to the past. They ended up in a small house that was full of children. They became the kids favorite toys and they were taken every where. Until finally they were forgotten in the car.
Once upon a time there were two storm troopers. Now, these two weren't any ordinary storm troopers, they were disobedient storm troopers. One day they got so bad that Darth Vader sent them to earth. On earth they were turned into toys so they couldn't do anything naughty. A young boy named Finn found them and rushed home so he could them to his growing collection of Star Wars items. The next day Finn decided to go to the zoo and he brought his new star troopers that he had found the day before. In the car, it got very cold and frost was freezing over the window. Finn stuffed the storm troopers in the net in front of him and cuddled up with a fuzzy blanket. When Finn's family got to the zoo he completely forgot about the storm troopers and left them trapped in the pocket. Finally Finn and his family came back to the car, but in Finn's arm was a new stuffed octopus. Finn never remembered to get the star troopers out of the net and they are still trapped there to this day.
Ugh it was a terrible day today. We were just playing peacefully and then this happened. Our owners mom said "boys lets go get some pizza." So of course they said "yeah lets go!" So they went and got their pizza and when you pulled into the drive way and they left us out here! It has been 17 minutes since this happened and I am dying. I am the one over here that is going totally nuts and then my friend over here is as calm and a cucumber! I don't know how he is doing it. So we have decided that we are getting out of here! (1 hour later) WE ARE OUT! So far we have made it to the windowsill and it is such a rush! I am still going crazy but I'm getting better at not TOTALLY freaking out.......
Once upon a time there was a camp of stormtroopers but there were two troopers that were very different then the rest. These two were curious and wanted to know what was beyond the camp. So one night they started to sneak out of camp when the camps guard dog, Ruffles, saw them. Ruffles loved these two because they always had time to play with him. So he got up, thinking they were here to play with him and started running around his chain. The troopers quickly tried to settle the dog down luckily he listened but when they tried to leave he started to bark. The camp had very clear rules to never be out past night fall so when the rest of the camp heard the barking they started getting up. The two troopers quickly unchained the dog and ran out of camp. When they were out of the camp and past the trees they saw a giant cavern with many giant mounds.....
Once upon a time there was Jim and Bob, they were storm troopers. Everyday there owner takes them on a bus ride. One day on the bus Jim and Bill were on the bus and there owner set them down in a basket to get something out of his bag because of that he left them there in the basket when he got off. Because of that the owner was really lonely because he lost Jim and Bill. Finally when the owner went on the bus to go to school he found them in the lost and found bucket! He was so happy that he found them! So when he got home he played with them for 2 hours and now he knows not to take them on the bus ever again.
I rolled a 1. No errors. Great job!
I rolled a 1. No errors. Great Job! :)
There are NO ERRORS.
Hello there I'm a storm trooper on a mission on planet vehicle.Right now me and my partner are on the side of a mountain in a patch of vines, we think. We are here scouting for any signs of any life. So far we were just talking about how this job is the worst we could have been fighting against the rebels or walking around on the Death star but or ship crashed and we where sent by Darth Vader and if we didn't stay we would be sentenced to jumping of the Death star without a ship or helmet.So we kinda have to stay here. So that is our mission log bye.
no errors good job me
once upon a time there was a family going on a trip The son loves Star Wars and every were they went there he had to bring his storm troopers and they went to get on the air plane and when the plane landed and the boy put his storm troopers in the pocket in front of his set and got up to leave and he left the storm troopers there where the next little kid will find them.
Once upon a time there was 2 guys named ed and tom. They used to fight bad guys. One day they were walking about on there land when they heard this knocking at the wooden gate. Tom went over to the wooden gate and opened it up. The people that were standing outside were 2 policemen. They had motorcycles. And instead of introducing them selves they just barged in and ran all over the town. They went into peoples houses and destroyed everything. 5 minutes Later they came back to us and asked us were we had treasure. Ed told them that we wouldn't tell. The next minute we found ourselves in this police wagon taking us away. They told us not to talk. But did we stop talking? No. We kept yapping our mouths. Then the wagon stops and we are dragged out and put into a room. It does have windows but they are covered with big metal bars. And 2 bunkbeds. There is no food and no water. We told them to let us out but they said no and we were stuck there forever.
Once upon a time there was a little boy named Jim. Every day Jim's mom would drive him to school. Jim always had his storm troopers in his hand. One day he dropped his storm troopers on the floor of the car. Because of that his mom found them and put them in the pouch on his car seat to keep them safe. Because of that she forgot about them and when she picked Jim up he was sad. Until finally he made his mom look all over the car to find them and it only took her about 1 hour to realize that they were in front of her face the hole time. Jim's mom decided that the next time that Jim dropped his toys she would put it somewhere safe so she would never loose them again. Jim and his mom live happily ever after.
"Bye mom!" Yelled John as he ran out of the front door with a granola bar and his Storm Troopers. As the bus came to it's screeching hault, John climbed into the bus. He sat next to his friend, Ben. They played storm troopers for a while. Then, their other friend, Kevin, sat in the chair behind them. John decided to put the storm troopers in the pocket for your books in front of him. When they reached the school, John thought that he put the Storm Troopers in his bag and not the pocket. The three boys got off of the bus. Then the bus driver pulled away from the school. The storm troopers looked at each other and smiled, (which is hard to see under their masks). That morning they watched outside from the window. When school got let out, everyone piled onto the bus. The Storm Troopers heard John talking to his friends about how sad he was that he lost his favorite toys. When the boys sat down, he was so happy because he found his favorite toys in the seat pocket!
I am a storm trooper and I like riding in the plane pockets . I like riding there because it is fun to spy on people and there kids. This is a very fun job to do so then if you see something wrong you can report to the flight attendance. It is also fun to have fun with the kids by playing with them.
all good rolled a 1
Hi, i'm Jorge and i'm with my friend billy. We are trapped in the bag on the back of a seat. This kid named Griffen found us and has been keeping us as toys. We are going to escape today. All we need is a rope. We see a Twizzler that will work but it to far away. Ohh wait the kid is picking it off the floor. We grabbed on to it. We fell on floor and now we are free. Gross the kid just ate it. We jumped out the window. We can live happy and free again.
You are good nothing is there.
One day, me and my friend were having a sleepover. It was a scary night... We were in my room listening to my music and trying on different closes. and we kept hearing tap tap noices like one of those clerk ladies with really long nails. My friend saying I was. But i dont have that long nails and it wasnt me. Soooo I thought it was my brother. So I went into my brothers room, AND HE WASNT THERE. I ran back into my room and said hes not there. One of my friends said. I think hes in the basement playing games. AND HE WASNT THERE! I started freaking out because i went back to my room and sat down and called my mom. She said hop on a taxi and come down to the Country club. I hung up and I saw something open my door. i ignored it and said we have to go. but heres the wierd part. when we got the the taxi 2 little black and white things jumped out of my friends bag! I screamed because one kjumped on my neck and said " Take me and my friend and put us in that bag.,......
SO i did.... I learned later htey were storm troppers trying to save the world!
Hi, my name is John and this is my brother Jake. Yes we actually look like this. Well let me get started. One day Jake and I were outside playing light wars. And everything was going fine until Bob our owner had to come and disrupt us from what we called fun. Bob picked Jake and I up and took us to his car and SMACK! We were slammed into the back of his seat. Ow!! Jake cried. Oh for the love of god will you shut up! I said. I'm trying to listen to the music. So that's how it happened. That's how we ended up in the back of the seat thing, that looked like a jungle gym thingy. The End!
no errors in this pargraph.
I rolled a 4 and found no errors. Good job!
There I am in prison for no reon a kid put me in here I dont no wy but he just put me in her so lets cut to the case so there i was i was running away from dark vator then this hug monster picks me up and puts me in his mouth then i shot him in his mouth and he droped me then a nother big monsterand put me on thes thing that move relly fast then put me on this thang that had a lot of monsters on it and put me in jail the end fokes.
Once upon a time there was these little clone troopers that was stuck on a back seat. Every day one died. Because of sickness. One day there was two left Because they aren't the sick one. Until finally they landed safely in New York city, New York. THE END :)
needs comas before because
Once upon a time, there was a little boy named Josepher. Josepher was a good little boy. Allways listening to his mamma about what to do and what not to do...until one day when that all changed. Joesph's mama was a nurse fort the soldiers in WWll. Joseph's mother had met a charming soldier who went by the name of Jackson one day in the hospital. Joseph's mother married the fine lad a year later in Pittsburg Pennsylvania, Joseph's home town. Joseph's mother was a great nurse, until she caught a disease from one of the men she was nursing. Now, Joseph was on his way to his mean and old grandmother's until he turned 16. Since Joseph was only eight years old, he couldn't go live with Jackson, or fight in the war. But, little did Joseph know, he had a little surprise coming for hi on the long train ride out west.
Joseph boarded the train, and started looking for an empty seat by the window. He noticed an old man getting off at this stop and decided he would sit there. The old man who had just sat there looked up at Joseph, and smiled
I rolled a 6. No simple sentences. Great job!
I wasn't so sure about hiding here.
"Are going to hide here or let that giant find us?" My best friend James asked with a hint of annoyance in his voice.
"Fine, but i want to do one last thing." I said.
and he waited for me to say something, but I didn't just to agitate him even more.
"Well?!" he asked even more annoyed. I laughed for a moment and then went instantly serious.
"we've gotta eat our guns."
"What!??!?!?!" my friend yelled at me.
"Yeah we've got to eat our guns."
Then a loud thud came from nowhere and then it came again only it sounded more like a bunch of loud footsteps.
"Look the giant ugly creature is coming and we don't have time, I'm not going in there til we eat our guns." I said to him in the best serious voice I could muster from this helmet.
"Fine, but we're going to do it properly." and with that being said he pulled out a table with a candle and fancy chairs with forks and and like 100 different types of spoons.
"Where the heck did you get that?"
He shushed me then took our guns and gestured for us to eat. we ate and then jumped into the pocket and the sound stopped. Then a roar echoed from behind us. Tehn the world felt like it was speeding away. I peeked to see the big, fat, ugly smellly giant. We went -
To be continued.....
So many errors! I had my screen down half way so they couldn't see me typing. And a lot of cap fails.
I rolled a 1. No errors! Great job! :) :)
Once upon a time there was a storm troopers Every day they took dance lessens One day one of them broke there foot
Because of that the other brother did not go to dance lessons
Because of that his brother who broke his foot was sad
Space log 1430 we have been captured by some very strange beings they act like they own us we are in some king of force field string wrap Jack has been handled a lot more then I have what should we do Vader we cant break their shield's its about 2500 hours right now and it seems like are going to some research facility known as 1038 Dodger Lane Florida some strange beings they are they drive like us they talk like us their technology is much like ours were being taken out of the net now its bright we must like be on the third planet from the sun or something we are being
One day bob and bill was walking in the store and there found the perfect mask and costume for Halloween. one the begot the dibble set they when home and put it on it was a tun then a of a sudden a glow came form them and they where stuck and every the was so big after all the dogs left they cold move they found out if something sees them they cold not move so they when to the only place they cold Canada when the got their the sat in a buss and stad there for ever
Once upon a time, there were two Stormtroopers.
Every day, people made them mad.
Because of that, they finally got enough and punched all those people till they were black and blue.
Because of that, no one messed with them because they were too scared.
Until finally, they stopped avoiding the Stormtroopers, but kept their distance. And the Stormtroopers lived happily ever after with people leaving them alone.
Let this be a lesson, you can try to see how far you get, but do NOT make people so mad to the point they hurt you. You'll regret that decision.
Once upon a time there were storm troopers. Everyday they rode in the storage pouch in the car. One day they were in the car and the family was going on vacation. Because of that they got to see more than just the town. Because of that they knew more about the world. Until finally they had to go back to the town. So then they just told all the other people about the areas they saw.
Once upon a time there were two storm troopers in a hug car in the storage pouch. Every day they talked about their wildest dreams. One day the had fallen farther in to the pouch there were supposed to. Because of that they were scared. Because of that they started developing schizophrenia. Until finally they starved to death. THE END
Huge car not hug car
Once upon a time there were two storm chasers.
Every day they would stay in a storage basket in the back of a fiat 500 and do nothing.
On day someone took them out of their baskets.
Because of that they got played with.
Because of that they were happy.
Until finally they discovered a whole new world...outside.
Once upon a time there was a bank robbing. Rodney and Mr berjanglez had done it again. 100 million dollars and it was all theirs. Every day they were either planing or did a bank robbery. Because of that the dupstep skeletons of Ebola came to put them in jail. Because of that they are trying to escape. Until finally they remembered that they were billionaires and they paid to get out and they lived happily ever after.
Mr needs a period.
Once upon a time there was two star war troopers that came to life. Everyday they would try to escape the giant web of the spider.One day they finally made it to the top until the spider came. And because of that the troopers needed to unleash themselves off the web and fall. And because of that they needed to that a century to get up there again. Until finally they made it and escaped it and lived theyŕe star war life until a butterfly took both of them and the troopers made its pet and killed the army of the other troopers in the toy area. THE END. :3
Opps i made tons of mistakes
Once upon a time there were two toy storm troopers that belonged to a boy named James. Every day, they would be put into James backpack for school and then put in the trunk of the car. One day, the two storm troopers fell out in the trunk on the way to James's school. Because of that, they were lost for 2 months. Because of that, they corroded and weak. Until finally, they were found and remade and then they lived happily ever after. The End
Once upon a time there were 2 storm troopers going on a very dangerous mission. In order to complete this mission they have to pretend they're toys with no homes and wait for a kid to come and take them to there house. When they arrive at the house they have to go to the basement and save another storm trooper from being help captive. It was in the middle of the day when the storm troopers were about to get ready for their mission. They got everything packed and where ready to go. They walk out and onto the school sidewalk where a lot of kids would see them. They were hoping that this certain kid would pick them up and take them home. When all the kids came out running and screaming they just laid there on the ground waiting, then this little red head kid comes and picks up the storm troopers. He decided to take them home and so he got inside his car and put them in the pocket behind his seat. They waited a long time until they finally arrived. Now all they had to do was get inside and rescue the storm trooper. They noticed that the kid was already walking into his house and forgot them behind his seat. They were so disappointed that they didn't save the storm trooper and failed the mission. They thought how were they going to get out of the car now? The End.
I rolled a 1. No errors. Great job.
Once upon a time there was 2 storm troopers named Billy and Bobby. One day Billy and Bobby got shrunk by a shrink machine and had to go on a mission. When they were walking they got picked up by a boy who thought they were toys. The boy and the storm troopers went on a school bus and went to school with the boy. While the boy's book bag was in his locker they had to escape! BIlly and Bobby escaped the locker and had a long journey out of the school. When they got out they called Darth Vader and they took them back to the base to continue their evil.
Great job! no errors
Once upon a time there were two storm troopers named Jimmy and Bob. Every day their owner would take them on the bus ride to school. One day their owner accidentally left them on the bus. Later on the bus driver found them and put them in the lost and found at the school. The owner looked for them at the lost and found the next day and he didn't see them. ...
One day while I was riding home from work in the storage compartment of a minivan we found our selves in, we almost died. My fellow storm trooper, Bailey, and I almost got our heads chewed off by a very large hairy creature. This beast had a long nose, and a tail that was waging like a windshield wiper in a downpour. I think I heard the giants calling it a dog, or something like that. Anyway, back to almost dying. So we were sitting peacefully in the trunk of the car, when the beast bit us and nearly broke both of us in half. Luckily the humans called off the beast before he could do that, and now we are in a pouch connected to the giants chairs.
I rolled a six and found no errors.
Geroge where do you think we are. I don't know John. all I rember is that we got sucked into that black pit and now I feel stiff. Ya I cant move my feet or arms how about you Geroge can you move. No I cant wait do you see that in the distance. what? The giant looking hand thing. Oh I see is it me or is it getting closer. Wait I think its going to pick us up. Get your lasers ready Geroge. John I think we lost them I don't have my laser. Nor do I I hoped you caught them nope. Well I guess this is the end I don't think we can get out of this one. nope we are so dead.
Once upon a time, two little toy storm troopers were sitting it the toy box. Every day, they would come to life and do random things. Until one day, this little boy came and took them out of the toy box and started hitting them against the wall. Because of that, the little boys mom came in and told the little boy that he needed to stop hitting them against the wall. Because of that, the mom threw the little storm troopers back in to the toy box. Until finally, one day they came alive and they started to do real damage with their guns. They started to shoot the boys bed and eat all of his food. Then when they left to go to school they got into the back of the seat in the storage area on the back of the seat. When they got to the school the storm troopers got out and hopped into the little boys bag. They followed him everywhere. Then they decided to start to shoot him in the back from his backpack. They did that all the way to his house where he later discovered them in his backpack and threw them out of his window where they then broke on the ground. The storm troopers had magical powers that out them back together. They then secretly went back into the house into the toy box to get revenge on the little boy.
I rolled a 1, and I found no errors :0
"Don't leave the basket," I told them. I had they listened they might have lived. You might be wondering who "they" are, and what happened to them. Well, I'll tell you just that.
It all started when they got lost down the storage basket in a car. The same thing had happened to me long ago. The men covered in white plastic suits that almost looked unearthly. They said they had come from another world searching for rebel scum. I really don't know what a "rebel scum" is. but the way they talked about them they sounded kind of weird.
Anyway, they left the basket looking for "rebel scum." I told the not to, and when I saw what happened to them i was in shock.
Rolled a 1, no punctuation errors.
Once upon a time and all that stuff, There was a storm trooper with a another storm trooper or two storm trooper with a banana squid I don't know they told me to tell this story or was it "He" I still don't know just they were on a train,the storm trooper not them or what ever. So the storm troopers where on a train or plain or weird looking house yeah and were looking out a window or something? and they were looking at what ever was or is out there and they had on cup or a bottle each? or......or. I don't know ask the troopers. The storm troops not like the police troopers.
Once upon a time there were two storm troopers that were stuck in a storage pouch in the back of a car.
Every day they would try to get out of this pouch but failed to do so. They would see so many people that looked so alike open and close the door every few hours.
One day, the storm troopers were trying to get out of the pouch that they were stuck in.
Because if this, they were successful at getting out of the pouch.
Because of that, they were free. Except for one thing, they could not get to the handle of the door to escape from the car.
Until two hours later, there were people outside the door waiting to get inside. They were able to get out just in time because the children were stepping on the board to get into the car. The two storm troopers were free for good. They ended up finding a little hut in the street where the water was to go down whenever it rained. They lived happily ever after. The End!
A long time ago, in a galaxy far far away, there where these two clones disguised as stormtroopers, one of the was Captain Rex, the other was Fives, and there on a remarkable journey to Dagobah. There were in a car in Tatoinne trying to find the Millenium Falcon, but there was nothing there. They had to leave quickly, so they looked everywhere and found a ship heading to Dagobah, so they jumped....
I rolled a 6 no errors.
Once upon a time there was two toys that were owned by the nice and sweetest little boy there was. Everyday the boy would play with his toy to make sure they didn't get lonely. One day the little boy's mom said that they wee going on vacation. The boy was so happy. He packed all of his toys and was ready to go. When they got to the airport and were done going through security the little boys mom said that they were running late and had to hurry. The boy Told his mom that he had to go to the bathroom. The mom told him to hurry as he ran through the door. When he came out they ran to the gate and got on the plane. As the boy was getting situated he realized that he had lost his bag of toys. He stared to cry. When his mom say him crying she asked what was wrong. He said that he lost his toys. His mom smiled and held him bag up so he could see it. He sad faced turned into a big smile. His mom said that he left it outside of the bathroom. He put the toys in the storage bag on the front of the chair. He was happy for the rest for the vacation.
I rolled a 1 and there were no capitalization and ending punctuation errors!